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Am I still your daughter, Mother?
Like an image tattooed in the sky,
I saw you there yesterday.
Your arms were held in a cross above your chest,
your mouth red and drawn,
like a cherry.
Did you love me then?

I remember a time when the sun shone from your face,
radiating with the love you had for me.
We would bask in the summer haze by the brook,
our legs mingling together in the water.
But no longer do we chase those dying days,
and I have grown old.

Were you sorry when you slipped away from me,
the girl with the nose ring and the chip on her shoulder?
I may have shaved my hair into jagged peaks atop my head,
but I am still the same little girl at heart.
You died when I was not yet a woman,
and you barely knew me.
Would my image scare you now,
or would you let down your barriers and hug me?

I missed the days when we were one,
when it seemed the cord was freshly cut.
Can you still see me,
dear Mother,
or has my form drifted from you to eternity?
©2005-2009 ~theONLYdevildog
:icontheonlydevildog:

Author's Comments

Disclaimer!: My mother is not dead, I am not a punk, and I actually have a good relationship with my mom!

Okay, now that that's done.

I'm experimenting with my poetry a bit. Instead of writing about myself, my feelings, my thoughts, I thought I'd write in an entirely different perspective of some other character. This particular one is about a rebellious daughter whose mother has just died.

Enjoy:)

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:icondarkpalace:
:(

That was a sad poem. And very beautiful. *sheesh* Why the need for an advanced critique? :) Seriously, I think it's wonderful.
:icontheonlydevildog:
Thanks:hug:.

It is sad...*sigh*. I wonder what promted me to write it.

--
Always forgive your enemies; nothing annoys them so much.
Oscar Wilde

Selfishness is not living as one wishes to live, it is asking others to live as one wishes to live.
Oscar Wilde
:icondarkpalace:
Hm. Maybe some current feelings? And maybe you manifested those feelings in a different light. You had to express yourself somehow. Better watch it, Sam! I'm a damn good psychologist, too. ;)
:icononb-6:
Aw...

This is a wonderful poem.

--
C'thulhu Fhtagn, what a wonderful phrase.
C'thulhu Fhtagn, aint no passing craze...
:icontheonlydevildog:
Thank you :thanks:

--
Always forgive your enemies; nothing annoys them so much.
Oscar Wilde

Selfishness is not living as one wishes to live, it is asking others to live as one wishes to live.
Oscar Wilde
:icontheonlydevildog:
:paranoid: Uh oh, I shudder to think what this reveals!

--
Always forgive your enemies; nothing annoys them so much.
Oscar Wilde

Selfishness is not living as one wishes to live, it is asking others to live as one wishes to live.
Oscar Wilde
:iconpandora9kry:
This is good! ^_^

--
-Your friendly neighbourhood Stage Manager/Dominatrix/Photographer

Love & Music...They are Forever.
:icondarkpalace:
Eh, not to worry! I won't psychoanalyze you or anything! lol!
:icontheonlydevildog:
Thank you!:aww:

--
Always forgive your enemies; nothing annoys them so much.
Oscar Wilde

Selfishness is not living as one wishes to live, it is asking others to live as one wishes to live.
Oscar Wilde

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